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It scares him
It's too big
And yet he knows it's small
The responsibility is far too heavy
And yet his burden is only light
He could carry more
Or cast it off at will
Or could he?
He doesn't know
It worries him intensely
And yet not at all
He has time to spend on everything
Yet no time at all
His time is all taken
Used up by living
What to do?
He can't go on like this
He can't go back
He must follow the river
Drift in the current
Spinning and swirling
Sucked in by the foam
Tangled in the reeds
Yet floating free
Among the frog spawn
Wherever the water takes him
Let the river carry him
Homeward to the sea
Release all thoughts and surrender
Surrender all thoughts of swimming
The river is god
Floating the star stuff
The child lays back
Secure in the light of love
That battles him mercilessly on rocks
That soothes him with it's great voice
That sings him to sleep with lullabies
Unmask?
Lie back and let me love
Be free
As the river grows salty
And flows to the sea
Let the waves comfort you
Listen to the song
Of all those other mariners
Who battle the current
Expend their strength
In a war they cannot win
Ultimately they achieve nothing
But strife
Troubled at the immensity
They fail to see the minutiae
Damaged by the intensity
Of their experience
They cease to feel
The ever-enveloping love
The ceaseless, eternal love
Of the creator
For it's struggling
Blind, heedless craft
Who fail to see the signs
That in it's great love
It sends by bright messengers
While it's children
See only the glint on the water
And fail to look up
To see where the shining
Originates
They are sailing
Into the quicksand
While he floats
Trusting, in, love,
Heedless to the cries
Of "Swim, Fool
"You're drowning".
Written 29th January, 2012.
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WhatsNotInside Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
I like this a lot... it's like a story about someone who's so complex but can be explained in one word, "Human." I've always had a fascination with drowning, and I must admit I love the last two lines best, but the beginning is good too.

I've nearly drowned a handful of times in my life, and I have to admit, it's kind of peaceful until the panic sets in.
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012
You've nearly drowned a handful of times? I've read that it's peaceful, but I can't imagine it being peaceful. Have you ever written about these experiences anywhere? If so, I would be very interested to read them, if that's okay.
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WhatsNotInside Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012
I kind of wrote some poems about it a while ago, I'll look them up and note them to you. I wrote about it in much more detail after all.
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ArtBennyRGrau Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this has so many things in it that its impossible to list them all but I love it.
I can relate to the child floating, takes you to an innocent time, yet the floating
person is naive and floating as before. Like accepting a gift all say is a lie or a delusion.
great job. It really kept me reading it to the end with great interest with no problems at all.
sweet!
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darkallegiance666 Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
Thanks so much!! I really like it too & it was so easy to write. I'm glad that it kept your interest & that it didn't give you problems reading. :)
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